The Art of Dodoitsu
The Art of Dodoitsu
I.
Double meaning hidden deep
pivotal turn into a pun
poetry of Royalty
a diving beauty.
Echoes of repetition
peculiar device meanings
remember pitch of vowel
sings each pillow song.
Dodoitsu considered
to be intolerable
too much alliteration
way too much rhyming.
II.
It is said near the summit
is a place where the snow melts
then falls and gathers again
when snow melts once more.
I passed a drainage ditch
noticed snowfall on Peavine
a white blanket of winter
falling on Reno.
Notice collection of grey
multiple clouds bring cold rain
possibility of snow
do not feel alone.
Winter fallen on desert
dilapidated cabin
alone in snow and sagebrush
no one will visit.
Tomorrow I had spring plans
to lay some sod and work on lawn
a storm brought snow inches thick
yesterday today.
Moonlight brought the winter’s dew
freeze surface of many lakes
spread glow upon a white world
this new winter world.
III.
While Cicada sing loudly
along the valley shadow
single line of blackened night
all constellations.
A beautiful reflection
like dew set a foot by breeze
a sudden sight of brilliance
balance in this life.
Went to marsh to pull Cattails
found happiness in tall reed
every marchland bloom
decided to stay.
Upon the Black Rock Desert
the moonlight creates silence
most birds of night will not sing
only Cicada,
IV.
Projecting old memories
of you and things we would do
when considering these times
happier today.
Luckily our memory
lasts longer than memory must
to exist then sublimate
something different.
I wish to be close to you
like pine tree caressing the wind
streams slowly erode the Earth
think of you always.
I will never wait again
our meeting would be better
if we would have slept and dreamt
moved slow like the moon.
If once the vault of heaven
opened up upon the stars
I can hold onto my love
for one more minute.
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From the beauty of nature to the beauty of love memories. I enjoyed this dodoitsu, Jamie. The form is perfect and flows nicely. I also love the picture of the bells. Well done.
Nice work Jamie. Tough to stay in the 7-7-7-5 form of a dodoitsu poem but you did a good job of it. Nice connection to winter as well. Good work.
Thank you Phyllis and Paul. Jamie