Awakening
The man matured …
Hello to you, my dear old friend,
Between these walls I breathe again
When last we spoke my sorrows cried
Upon a floor, this world denied
But I am better than before
And strong enough to break that door
Then through the arch onto the plains
I cast aside those cloaks of shame
In restless dreams, I weathered storms
And rid this mind of demon swarms
I stared eyes wide at you once more
Inside those clothes that you once wore
and screamed so loud it shattered glass
then striking shards of you amassed
Upon the floor those stupid dreams
The ones so close that never seemed
To find an end, and were ignored
And like we are, this broke rapport
Inside of me are poems left,
A bounty of my life in depth
The words which paper cannot hold
The chapters of my story told
A voice not heard for years restored
The body and the man matured.
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I love the rhyme and flow of this poem, Paul. These things alone make your writing a pleasure to read.
Thank you John much appreciation as always.
Beautiful flow with excellent rhyme scheme, Paul. I always appreciate your work and enjoy reading it. My friendly and sincere critique is on your “My Posts”. Your word count is low, yet your quality is high as always. Marvelous poem to an old friend, I love it.
Thank you,so much Phyllis. Im glad you enjoyed it. I know i need to work on my word count, sometimes i find if my poems are too long they become muddled, but nonetheless i do need to address it. Thank you again
Hi Paul. Rather than muddle up your poems and lose the passion/skill you put in them, you can add an author’s note at the end and/or maybe a quote from a famous person to boost word count. The quote would be one that supports your subject. I would not expect you to do anything to change your style and beauty of your poetry. One good example of a quote for this post is:
“One of the most beautiful qualities of true friendship is to understand and to be understood.”
– Lucius Annaeus Seneca
BrainyQuote has excellent ones on any subject. Just type ‘quotes on friendship’ in your browser and click on Brainy Quote. I love your poetry, Paul. Don’t force the word count if it takes away the impact of your poem. I will just do the best I can to work on the SEO tech side to help on low word counts.
Ok. I can try that
Nicely expressed Paul, of the changes in perspective as we grow older and look back at our lives. Your skills technically are excellent and the flow makes the work so easy to read and enjoy. Cheers!
Thank you so much Tony.
Are you Simon or Garfunkle in disguise ? I actually sung the first stanza to the “sound of silence” but replaced your words….and it was spot on my friend. This piece is wonderful.
Thank you so much Ralph, that is such a great song by Simon and Garfunkel, i am honored by the comparison, and do appreciate your kind words.
At so young an age, you are reconnoitering those feelings lived by the grown up inside the younger.
So many passing fancies become that which survives the creative upheaval of the maturation process, ongoing as it is. A well done general look inside both beings, as they have remained!
Thank you so much Donald for your kind remarks
A truly wonderful poem. I share a lot of the same sentiments.