Revelation – Take Me If You Will – Part Three

Eve of Revelation …

Down in the dungeon

Elisabetta’s mind wanders in a turmoil of relief and great need as she paces back and forth in the drawing room. He is gone! Abram is gone and truly dead! I am free! With a silver stake through his heart and staked to the ground to meet the morning sun, he is truly gone.

He is nothing but ashes now and blowing in the ethereal realms. And I am free forever from him. Abram…sometimes I miss you, Abram – your great passion, your fire within…NO! I am rid of him.

Mikael! Oh, Mikael. Will you still love me and hold me when I tell you what I am? I will never harm you. I will love you for ever more. But, you will one day die as all mortals do. Come, let me give you immortality as I have.  No! I cannot do that!

She doubles over in emotional pain and holds her stomach as her screams of agony echo throughout the castle.

You will never be like them, she whispers as she looks up to the portraits in the great hall, tears streaming down her face and dropping on her cloak. I could not do that to you!  She drops her head in shame. Nor will you be like me – existing in eternal damnation. This is not a life. This is a hell of constant torment and sorrow.

Later, Mikael stared at her face in horror when Elisabetta told him what she was and how long she had roamed the earth in tormented damnation.

He shrank back from her and covered his mouth then his whole face as he wept. With tears streaming down his face he stared at the one he so loved and wanted to care for the rest of his life.

He did not believe her till she showed him her coffin and the demons in the dungeon who were rising from their own beds of horror and lust, blood dripping from their mouths as victims lay beneath them. In terror Mikael shrank back as one demon rushed towards him.

Elisabetta stepped in front of him and held up her hand, glaring wildly and threateningly at the demon of the night, as Mikael turned and vomited on the floor of the dark and musty dungeon. The smells of the old dirt, decaying bodies and fresh blood overcame him and he ran back up to the great hall, grabbing his cloak and hat to rush out to his carriage.

Eve of Revelation ~

Mikael’s mind was tormented, full of thoughts he could not fully grasp. The dangerous speed he was riding was not good and the harsh rasping breath of his horse brought him to some sense of reality.

The horse needed rest so he slowed down and stopped. Hot breath from the horse vaporizing in the cold air. Now what am I to do? His mind went over the last several nights when many men of the village tracked down and finally found the evil one. They had destroyed it and left it staked to the ground where the sun would burn it to ashes. He did not know till tonight that the evil one was in the same castle as Elisabetta. It had never occurred to him, never entered his mind that she was a part of the killings and the revelation startled him. He believed her story that she had descended from royalty and inherited the castle and land, rather than listen to his inner doubts.

Now he knew he must save her from that eternal damnation. But, how could he  destroy the woman he loved? He was a man of God and had to do the right thing in His name. That revelation alone calmed him.

With his mind calming and reaching resolve he continued on slowly home, knowing what he had to do the next day.

© Copyright 2016 All Rights Reserved Phyllis Doyle Burns

Watch for the next showing of Take Me If You Will – Conclusion, coming soon to The Creative Exiles.

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I am the Senior Editor and SEO Editor for The Creative Exiles (TCE). I edit all posts to help members achieve an acceptable score on Google and other search engines. I am also an author on TCE and write mainly in poetry and short stories. I have always liked to write. It is important to me that writing comes from my heart and soul. When writing poetry, if I do not feel a spiritual connection to what I am writing on, I will discard it and go on to something I can connect with on a spiritual level. I live in the moment, I write from the past or beyond the veil. When writing fiction I go with whatever inspires me at the moment - it could be funny, sorrowful, romantic or sometimes done with the use of colloquial language from mountain folk or other cultural regions. I began writing content online in 2007, starting with BellaOnline - A Voice For Women, where I was the Native American Editor, Folklore & Mythology Editor, and the Appalachian Editor. I also wrote articles for The Examiner, Daily Two Cents, and Yahoo. I am a freelance writer for Fiverr. I am currently an author on HubPages, a member/author of the Maven Coalition, and Senior Editor and an author for The Creative Exiles. Most of what I write takes a lot of research and I love it. Even if it is a fictional story, I will research for accuracy in whatever it takes to make my characters, their era, their location, etc. become realistic to the reader. I hope you enjoy my works. Thank you for visiting.

7 thoughts on “Revelation – Take Me If You Will – Part Three

  • July 26, 2016 at 1:09 AM

    Great work Phyllis, sitting on the edge of our chairs. Love it. By the way under ‘Eve of Revelation, shouldn’t it be ‘riding’ and ‘rode’ as in horse, not car? Now, how to save a vampire from the eternal doom…Look forward to it. Nicely done.

    • July 26, 2016 at 5:53 AM

      Good catch on the riding / rode, Tony, thank you. I made corrections.So glad you are enjoying the story. Hmmm … how to save a vampire … this will take some thought. Thanks, appreciate your comment.

  • July 26, 2016 at 1:43 AM

    You are maintaining the suspense with this one, Phyllis, and each part is the perfect length. I look forward to the net part but hope Mikael can somehow save Elisabetta from eternal damnation without killing her. After all she protected him.

    • July 26, 2016 at 5:57 AM

      Poor ol’ Mikael does have a dilemma on his hands, doesn’t he? She did do him a favor. So happy you are enjoying this, John. Conclusion coming out very soon. Thanks for staying with the story.

  • July 26, 2016 at 8:04 AM

    Okay, so leave us hanging. Thank you very much, Phyllis. Wonderful tale, and I’m looking forward tot he next chapter.

  • July 26, 2016 at 11:27 AM

    Like I said, a page turner :). Can’t wait to see what Mikael decides to do….so many possibilities. An enjoyable read, begging for more.


    • July 26, 2016 at 9:32 PM

      Hi Mel. Conclusion is coming up sometime tonight. My original story was much longer, but got far too complicated for me. LOL Thanks for reading and commenting.


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